March
23
Heather mocking bird
The heather mocking bird
We took no notice of the sign.
It was a cold and dark evening; Emma had just been to school. The school of torture, democracy and savage minds. Their house sat on top of a hill quiet uninterrupted until Mrs. English came to town. She designed; Petticoats, cardigans and berets.
Emma wanted to go and see the normal world away from her cut throat school. Away from her annoying brothers and sisters.
One night, Emma decided to walk into town, where the happy and bright people rested their head.
There it was
A heather mocking bird…
What strange tale! You were really trying to create a rather menacing feel to your work. Mrs English was an interesting character. In the sentence about her you used a semi-colon, I’m not sure that you’ve thought that through – were you using punctuation as a gateway to a list? – perhaps have a think about that. Do you want to edit that before I publish it on the 100 change site?
Rather sinister Erin. I wouldn’t like to meet Mrs English.
Which piece of punctuation could you use as a gateway to a list?
Mrs Murrin
colon?