July
10
100 word challenge The Painting By James
I put down my umbrella and slotted it into the stand. Despite my umbrella, I was drenched and glad to be in the gallery. There was an exciting hum, the shabby walls were a pale yellow and the air was slightly musty and smelly.
I walked over to the nearest painting. It was titled Lost and it showed a sorrowful zebra alone in a vast desert. Next to it, was a cactus, its prongs sticking out in an obscure way.
In the background, a herd of zebras were galloping away. I looked curiously at the painting: how it got there.
How did it get there? Sorrowful – is a well chosen adjective- I can imagine it very clearly?
I love this writing James you have chosen some very good adjectives
I like the way you’ve captured a feel for a gallery. It matches the emotion of the painting. I wonder if more sparse language would enhance. For example have a look at the sentence with two ands.
Nice work, James.