January
14
The Cliff by Oliver
As the car climbed up the cliff slowly, the music blasted loud. I turned the music down because I had to concentrate on the road.
When I got up to the top of the cliff in the vehicle the furry dice dangling I looked down I was up too high.
I drove down the cliff slowly and looked carefully otherwise I would fall and die. I continued on the road carefully. when I got down the cliff I set off into the distance. a few minutes later I had reached safety before the cliff collapsed. I watched the cliff crumble.
Good work Oliver keep it up
Hi Oliver, wow this is a tense situation and good on you for getting safely down the cliff, just in time. A well written and well put together 100WC piece, thank you and well done.
Hi Oliver
I think you have used all the prompts for this 100WC in a really natural way. How frightening it would be to see a cliff crumble! Next time remember to re-read your writing, especially for punctuation. It makes it much easier for the reader to understand your writing.
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
Wellington, New Zealand