November
27
100 word challenge The Bazaar BY James
I swung the door open, its rusty hinges squealing at the weight of the door. I entered grandad’s bazaar. A smiling face greeted me.
“Grandad.” I beamed.
Once we said are greetings, I had a around the look around his lonely store. A colourful, porcelain elephant caught my attention: its silver skin shinning in the gloomy room,a stripped red jacket had been painted over it and a stretched out ears with steam shooting out.
As I turned around inquisitively, to examine an other object, my hand smashed into violin that had a happy face on it.
I was in trouble
Hi James,
Your story is excellent. You have used fantastic vocabulary and exciting adjectives. I really enjoyed reading your story as you have been very creative with the prompt words.
There are a few mistakes for example you used ‘are’ instead of ‘our’ and one of your sentences in paragraphy 3 seems a bit jumbled. Despite this you story stands out this week.
Well done.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w.c
James, how you describe the elephant really caught my attention too