October
2
When it just wouldn’t take off by James
Running, flapping, tripping. Pain. A blur. Blackness.
I woke, my breathing heavy echoing in the cool, black room .
“Oh so now you decide to wake up?” asked a familiar blunt voice a click illuminated the room blue hangings were draped around me, staring back at me were brilliant emerald eyes on a lean face. “Luca! ” I said my older brother smiled “So are you going to tell me what happened?”
“OK,” I replied “I tried to make a contraption fly!”
“And when it just wouldn’t take off?”
“I tried to fly off a cathedrals.” Luca smiled his contagious smile.
Drawn by Tim Culkin
Not every day is good but there is good in every day!
James,
Your writing style is a joy to read. I especially enjoyed the way you used the series of words as your lead. You pulled me right in.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA
Really good but remember your punctuation!
Your writting is amazing please write some more