October
2
Take off – Louis
Sitting in a large, dense aeroplane, I was eager for the flight to Africa. Looking out of the glass window, the trees swayed viciously with the whistley wind. Finally, all of the passengers had boarded the plane. The immense tyres clamped onto the the dull vehicle. The wheels started to move fiercely along the long track. Faster, faster, faster the plane went accelerating up the road like a dog snapping at your heels.
FIVE! FOUR! THREE! TWO! ONE! Tension suddenly seeped into me. When it just wouldn’t take off. A hot stream of transparent tears leaked from my red eyes.
Dear Louis,
I liked how you included a trip to Africa in your story. I also like how you included yourself in the story and a plane. Mine is kind of like that, come check my blog out at
https://kidblog.org/class/7th-grade-english-19-20/posts/7v4ovp4knz0vg8poglr4wp8w9
I really enjoyed your story!
-Shaela
Great writing and love the adjectives👌🏻👍🏽
All of those fabulous adjectives! I reckon there certainly would be a stream of tears if the aeroplane wouldn’t take off….yikes. Perhaps a scream or two as well?
Thanks for your entertaining response to the prompt.
Michelle, Team 100wc,
Melbourne, Australia